Friday, June 29, 2012

5SF: Harvest





HUZZAH! Lillie McFerrin has posted another Five Sentence Fiction challenge
This is my spin on the current prompt:

HARVEST


Reaping souls was a grisly business - but curious too, and full of surprises. The final gasp, a last look of wonder (or terror), a squeaky question forced through a dying breath...there was no way to know how a person would ultimately face death until the last second.

Welsan hadn't filled his soul-glass in a while. His customers weren't happy; they'd been begging for a fresh supply for weeks - but he wasn't worried. Murder and war, plague and massacre all thrived in the world, and it was his duty to know where to find them.

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20 comments:

  1. Love the idea that he collects souls in a glass, and has to answer to customers x

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    1. Thanks! Not sure where that came from.... o__O

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  2. I loved this! So macabre and so true. War seems to always be among us. Good job.

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    1. Thank you --- and thanks for reading!!

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  3. Lordy. The photo made me cringe as well as the story of Welson collecting souls. Great, creative imagination here.

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    1. Thank you! It surprised even me...not sure where it came from, but I think it works.

      Thanks for reading!

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  4. Very grim, but a great use of the word Angela! Creepy!

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    1. Thank you!! It was unexpected, even for me, but a lot of fun to write. :)

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  5. Angela! Reaping souls - an eery, well written story. I like how it starts out being a grisly business ...'full of surprises'. I can hear the tone change and the speaker rubbing his/her hands together in glee. Well done you!

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    1. Thank you!! I did have a rather gleeful moment while writing it...a bit out of character for me, but so much fun that I may try to do more with the idea. Who knows??

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  6. Wow, love your voice in this piece! Casual, yet deep and dark...

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  7. Great concept and nice execution, setting up the tension with his "clients" to make us want to read more.I loved the line about squeaky questions forced through dying breath. Nice!

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    1. Thank you! Only, now *I'm* wondering who his "clients" are...

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  8. I particularly like that the glass was not full!! A tantalizing, macabre twist on the prompt.

    http://www.thejadedlens.com/2012/07/04/just-weeds/

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    1. Thank you - and thanks for reading!!

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  9. Beautiful.... retail language juxtaposed with the concept of the immortal soul. Nicely done.

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    1. Thank you!! Welsan is certainly an entrepreneur of the strangest sort. Really enjoying working on his storyline.

      Thanks for reading!

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